Thursday, 3 March 2016

What do I see at French Farm?

What do I see at French Farm?

The sheep; 
chillin’ with the geese, 
not even caring if they step in the sheep poop.

The trees;
swaying like colossal green butterflies
in the swooping wind.

The sea;
gosh, all the way up here it looks like it's doing nothing!
But I know it's drowning the salty sand as it crashes onto the beach.

The sky;
 ‘busy’ being the world’s most popular colour.
(Yeah right).

Down the hill;
 slipping and sliding dry dirt and grass,
 pine trees dotted here and there.

The barn;
 standing there like a stale cookie,
 the lichen looks like mould.

Sun;
casting light around the world
(or at least half the world anyway.)

Mountains;
casting shadows over the farm on the other side of the road. 
In my head I hear French Farm sniggering. Ha ha!

Road; 
looping and swooping like a big,
grey snake, towards the beach.

Iris; 
I can't see her, but I can hear her loud scream of joy echoing through the valley.
Yup, that's how loud she is.

I smell dinner. I don't know what it is, but it smells nice! 
After all, it is Christmas Day...

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I'm learning to use these ‘;’ and I'm practicing making EVERYTHING I write have some humour in it. I'm learning to use personification. My favourite part of personification was ‘trees, swaying like colossal green butterflies’. Not because I like butterflies. I like imagining giant, creepy green butterflies killing every being in its path and taking over the universe.
I am going great because I really like helping my literacy buddy Ruby. She is AWESOME! I think my writing is multistructural because I put multiple ideas in the poem.


4 comments:

  1. Great writing Naima I really enjoyed reading it' I liked how you made it funny. Hope it's all going well.
    Lucy

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  2. Wow Naima this is amazing I like how you said go shall the way uphere it looks like it's doing nothing but I think know it's drowning the salty sand as it crashes onto the beach i luv it keep up the great work I couldn't do something as good as this and also I like how you said like sun Then you did what the sun kinda looked like and you also did it with Iris so cute keep it up
    Gabby

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  3. Fantastic writing Naima! I love the personification you use when you say
    The sky;
    'Busy' begin the worlds most popular colour
    That was super funny, I love your writing skills so much!

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